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[Dinosaurchestra]

Not bad at all:)

Before I say anything, I just want to say that I think many of the reviewers behind me are being a bit overcritical here; I know some have already mentioned this, but I thought that it was important to add another voice to the group of people saying you did a good job.

As for the flash itself, like I said, It was not bad! Of course there is always room for improvement, but i'll start off with the good stuff. The music was good on top of being fine quality, although that isn't very hard to do compared to animation so long as you have good taste.

Speaking of animation, I think you did a good job at that as well. It is clear that you are working towards the point where you are good enough at animation that you will soon be able to develop your own styles. You aren't there YET probably, maybe two or three more animations away, but you have the cartoony look down just fine (which works well for Lemon Demon), and all the motions were nice and fluid. I would suggest you keep up the good work; at this point I think practice will make perfect.

Now for some constructive criticism. There were only two significant flaws that I found in this flash: Lip synching, and lack of subtitles. In a music video you don't have to worry about making up dialogue or recording anything, but you DO need to be sure that people can understand the lyrics that are being sung in order for them to fully appreciate the song and your visual interpretation. For that, the simple solution (which is not too hard to implement) is lyrics going along the bottom. If you REALLY wanted to be flash you could somehow incorporate them into the animation itself, but that could also be something that would take away if done poorly. The next thing that you should really try to do in a music video is make sure the visuals match up perfectly with the music. This is particularly difficult, as you probably figured out, but it adds a lot to the experience (for instance, it would have been if the drummer dino was hitting on beat). For things like beats you can maybe make a temporary layer and take a half hour to map out where all the beats are by drawing dots in the frames that hold them. And yeah, the t-rex/neil were a bit off at points, but you will get that down as you get more experience.

So yeah, once again, keep up the good work and please continue to submit it!

- Dan Schultz (slifty)

altffour responds:

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So yeah I realized after my last review that you WERE the guy who made the other lemon demon flashes! So scratch all the stuff about style:P it is your own (i wasn't harsh at all, but when I wrote it i was uninformed)."

I just wanted to clarify to anyone reading this for the misunderstanding. Thanks for the critique

[One Pie to Rule Them All]

I wasn't as impressed as the others

I'll start off by saying that you clearly know how to write flash movies that aren't blatantly terrible; however, I dont feel that this is an example of a breathtaking animation.

The graphics were above average, detailed enough and they looked like what they were supposed to look like. The voices could be understood just fine, and although there were a couple times when the lip sync wasn't perfect, you did a pretty good job at it.

Although there was a clever part or two, the overall story wasn't great (it works fine in the actual movie/book, but as a standalone scene it doesnt spark too much interest). The underlying joke wasnt a gem either, more could have been done.
The real issue here is that the script was patched in between being serious and being funnny, and in the end it didnt do a great job at either because of that. If you had thrown in more gags and lines of your own i feel it would have drastically improved the script. Then again, it worked well for what it was.

There is more that I could say but I wont continue to babble.

Basically, this flash was fine, not bad, not extremely amazing, just fine. You do have talent though so keep up the good work!

Bogswallop responds:

Thx for the detailed review. You made some good points, but it's only meant to be a little short. Nothing major or anything. Thanks for being positive overall and not going 'OMGLOL THIS SUXORS'